WaterVyper

Very creepy story. I loved reading this. After reading your original Halloween, the ending was kind of obvious. And yeah, I agree with little tin fish on the vocabulary point. ...

Wow. This poem was creepy. It was chilling, and I liked it. The atmosphere was well conveyed here, and it was very well written. However, having some lines long and ...

I got rather drunk at Stu’s and was having a pretty good time until I saw it was eleven o’clock and Nick still wasn’t here. You have a few other ...

This left me speechless. It was wonderfully written, and I couldn't find much to nitpick here. I'm really sorry that I did. His mother, distraught by her husband’s death, slipped ...

Wow. Sorry for not being more specific, but this was amazing! One small detail, however: with a thin patience. Shouldn't you omit the 'a'? It sounds a bit awkward otherwise. ...

Wow. This was nice. In some parts, it seemed a bit too scientific, and that took away some of the beauty. That's only in my opinion, of course. As a ...

Ooh, I liked this one. This was really good, and I agree with vox. I'd like to know a bit more about the setting. If you'ev seen the series on ...

Not that long ago, not very far from here, there was a man, walking through a city park. I think you can omit the third comma. It seems like a ...

This was beautiful. It moved me in ways I cannot express in words, and I loved it. Your mastery of words here (and everywhere else) is so wondrous. One small ...

Wow. This was really well written. I couldn't find much to nitpick here. My hands, shaking, reached up to the door and twisted the knob as he had told me ...

The worst kinds of dreams are not nightmares, they are the kinds of dreams where reality is a ship that sailed many years ago, where there are no such questions ...

This is very interesting. Mostly observation here, hm? Anyway, I liked this. It was maybe a little random but I liked the mysteroius touch at the end. The sandwich is ...

This is a nice beginning, though the ending was a little bit cliche. Also, you have a problem with your tenses. You switch from past to present, which isn't good. ...

This is very...deep. This made me think for a while, which is something I look for in all writings like this. However, I feel like you are using too many ...

I absolutely loved this piece! All of the emotion was so strongly shown here, and I found that I can relate very well. I'm sure that everyone here has experienced ...