Warlock

Really great, just one thing you use And a bit much which i suppose is ok, but And is a word I always hated. EDIT: Snoink beat me to it ...

I'll comment after my suggestions :) I took a stroll along a lonely shore Seeking something I cannot define. In that moment of loneliness, In the midst of confusion, I ...

The way this is written is brilliant, all I can say. Also I love the flashbacks. I'm reading it and everything seems so real, way to capture the reader!

Eh just read your post Sokool, eh, now I feel to shy "Everybody here is perfect," pfft, I'm sending Alainna all my work before I post it now :p

Alainna! This is wonderful, who knew. (Joke) This is actually damn good, it's like Junk just better :p I love it even though I hate non-fantasy stories :) I'm reading ...

I understand it, but the image in my mind wasn't so strong, perhaps some metaphors would improve it, unless the fact that there are no metaphors is meant to add ...

I love it, but I think you should change your final line to: South for the winter that NEVER ends. It rolls off the tongue a lot easier, but I'm ...

Hey I'm mainly into poetry, I have no imagination to write a story... Unless you want me to depress the hell outt ya :p

Hey Guys and Gals, I'm new here, I heard about this site from a friends in school and thought I'd check it out. I'm not the best at English; I ...