WaitingForLife

Thanks a lot all of you. ^^ I'll see what I can do about the things you suggested and thanks again. :P I'll most probably delete this on the morrow ...

Thanks niapitts! ^^ Yeah, that's what I meant by going over-board at times... But oh well, I quite like it this way. Any suggestions anyone on how to possibly improve ...

Thanks for the comments Paul and Spitfire. :) No-one would indeed like that sort of thing, Spitfire, and that's exactly why it's there (sick, sick me :P). But jokes aside, ...

Thanks for all the comment! ^^ I'll clean it up mostly as you suggested Kafka. The lack of capitalization is completely intentional; in fact, I had to really strain not ...

I actually do mean literally built from marble. It's all intentional though, as I use the manor with its walls as a metaphor of the Duke himself. And besides, in ...

Oh... Now I see what you mean. It does sorta break up the flow; I'll fix it straightaway. Glad it came out good. ^^ Thanks for that.

Thanks for the review! ^^ Yeah, I noticed the double-link thingy myself. It just doesn't let me fix it; I've no clue why. :D I'll change those things you mentioned. ...

Thanks SubZero! ^^ I personally like the word "chorus", so I'll keep it. :P The other mistake: fixed. Good questions, Spitfire. First one: it was too dark to see properly, ...

Heya, thanks for the crit! ^^ I might just delete the sixth stanza altogether, as I wasn't that sure about it in the first place either... The stanza where you ...

Hey, thanks for the critique! :) Yeah, haha, wrote this in like 20 minutes to kill time in the morning. :P But I liked it and wanted to see if ...

Thanks for the comment! :) My computer is retarded and doesn't want to flip the quotations marks around, so nothing I can do there. :P But yeah, the second part ...

Thanks for the comments on this! :) Sure thing Paul, I'll PM you when the next chapter is up. Oh and btw, it's "Nobles and Beggars", but let's not get ...

Thankyou so much for the comment! :) I'll think of a better word than "white-ish" if it was indeed the only thing you saw it lacked. :P

Thanks Paul, I'll see what I can do about the gore. ;) I have no intention of dropping this; rather I'm trying to come up with a better scheme for ...

Water is incorrect I'm afraid. :P Uu, another really nice guess with good evidence behind it, eldermimi, but it's not what I'm looking for. ^^ Over-analytical is the right word; ...