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Re: Your deadly embrace
Wow thanks
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Re: DEAR MUM
Powerful and sad, theres nothing else you can say.
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Re: Cliche
I really like this, moving, good wording, good structure and an overall nice poem.
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Re: Your deadly embrace
Sometimes, When I look upon a spider I think of you. You, In all your deadly beauty, Master of your universe. Your web, A glittering galaxy, Abound in constellations. And ...
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Re: Fear and him.
Nice. A interesting style you've you used to describe fear, I don't really think it needs anything else, simple and gets the meaning across quite well.
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Re: My Little Brother.
Very nice, some lines throughout the poem sounded abit forced but other than that very good.
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Re: That's all
Not bad, but not brilliant either. Your emotions were expressed strongly but a little vaguely.
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Re: Shelf Life
Man can I realate to that, no one takes you seriously when your a kid. A good poem, needs some work. The theme was the best thing here, countless kids ...
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Re: Our Great Planet Earth
Thanks anonamuse.
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Re: Forgiveness
K thanks guys, It's still in rough draft so i've only put the basic ideas for it down, but i see what you mean by it not sounding um "poemy" ...
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Re: Our Great Planet Earth
Thanks pinata, I really hope I get an A in this for school... especially since i havnt got an A all year... Thanks
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Re: Forgiveness
This is a little something i just came up with, still very much in rough draft My heart Crushed Forever torn From happiness The darkness Creeps in Filled with My ...
Apr 18, 2008 -
Re: kung fu
I don't really understand the meaning very well, how ever I like it this way. It lets me expand on your very nice job and come up with my own ...
Apr 18, 2008 -
Re: Burnt Remnants
Nice poem but still needs a bit of work, your definitions in my opinion are to standerd. In other words basically what medusa said. I particularly liked this bit Where ...
Apr 18, 2008 -
Re: Our Great Planet Earth
This is actually my homework, had to right a poem about the enviorment. Across the great, vast, oceans. With waters crystal blue. Across the great, vast, deserts. With sands a ...
Apr 18, 2008
