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Um could someone please review. Thanks

I like it alot, just on the last line, it upsets the rhythm, take out the "the".

The gaze of our leaders, Staring down at us from above. Watching, waiting for a chance to strike. They turn and laugh amongst them, Forgetting the perils of the people, ...

First thats an awsome tital you've got, best tital in the world. A very interesting poem, it has rwal meaning to it. Keep it up.

Wow, that was so deep. Your seriously gona make me cry. And your wrong, thats a very awsome poem. It was so deep, you've really drawn me in with that. ...

I love it, excellent rythem, good use of words, I really liked the first few stanzas.

Thanks everyone.

K thanks vernon you've been really helpful.

K thanks vernon you've been really helpful.

Liked the poem. The flow and ryhthm were its strengths.

Wow very nice poem, one thing though, the transition from the 2nd stanza to the 3rd stanza is abit odd. It's confusing, is it supposed to be a full stop, ...

Wow that must've taken you ages to write. Good work. Personally I dont like you saying "three steps ahead" over and over again but thats just me, alot of people ...

Thanks rick EDIT: wait did you say rhyming? Um where did I rhyme it lol

I remember my brother, Smiling and laughing, So full of life. I remember my father, Hearty and cheery, His eyes twinkiling like the stars. And I remember them as they ...

It's alright, not exactly mind blowing but it doesn't disgrace poetry, some bits were actually quite good.