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Re: She is Runnin'
Raven's dad is a DEMON?!?! SATAN, no less! W. O. W. I just saw where you got this from, and just let me sy yours superbly rocks over that. Love ...
May 6, 2011 -
Re: Piano Man
Funkymomo: personification. Thats the word you were looking for. Kay. Lets get down to buisness. Stanza one:good. Nice way to open up the poem. I particularly liked how the rhyming ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: NR 23
One thing you have taught me is to always heed rating warnings. But hey, im not being all bitchy about it. Im cooler than that. :) ok. Lets get down ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Sincerely, Brain
Well done!!!!! My favote part is the last four lines. I made a poem kinda like this only it wasnt a letter. This actually reminds me of a site. Dearblankpleaseblank.com. ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: My Best Friend
Okay, before I start, remember that this poem is actually really awesome. Im just breaking it down. My best friend is always there for me/ good opening so far... She ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Why? All For You.
Each time the wretched tears came, Drying too soon on my cheek, I halfheartedly hid them. Really, I'd hoped you would see. When the blade left light pink scars That ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Some Haikus
Predator: Lion stalking prey/ This sounds a bit primal. Rudimentary. Maybe try "lions stalk thier prey"? Camoflauged in the long dead grass/ You are trying to fill the spaces here. ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: I wonder Why
The begining is great. Thenbyou start to write like my brother. My brother is ten. With a learning disability. No offense but seriously. Everyone is right. Grammar dude. Grammar. Not ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Second Chance Chapter - Chapter Four
Oh oh oh oh this looks goood. Is there more? Can you give me the links for them? Pwetty pweez? I will review each one if you want. Because this ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Nightrise
If this doesnt get featured, Im kicking someone's butt. This is awesome EtCetera!!! The topic is unique, the poem is unique. It is truely brilliant. I love the flow and ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: April Derivatives
Umm. English?
May 1, 2011 -
Re: i hold the keys
*is speechless* wow. That was good poetry. By the way, people cant copy work. Its not allowed here. Just saying.
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Knock them on Down
Well well well well. Is this like saying "you knock us down but we will fight back"? So cliche, yet your poem is so original. No no. This is not ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Kiss Me, before I Die
Oh my cheese with cherries on top! Thay was awesome!!! Is there more to this? Im reading it. I must. This ROCKS. Really you did awesome. Some typos here and ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: I give.
W. O. W. That was was wcked amazing. My favorite line was "i think ill keep that lat one/the one where you hit my heart" loved it!!!! There are a ...
May 1, 2011