VousEsEtonnant

*laughs* KatTrain, last three lines you critiqued, starting with "what a shame we all became" thats her signature. PurpleHeart, you did a fantabulous job. Especially for an on the spot ...

Also how we fought so much and i had to say things to her like "its hard to trust someone who always let you down" at the age of 7. ...

PurpleHeart, don't be so quick to judge. Some can relate. Like how my mom is addicted to crack and how she made all these promises she never kept and i ...

This is a really nice poem. I enjoyed it so much, I read it three times. The rhyth is steady, the theme and mood are clear. And the topic is ...

Thi is brimming with violent awesomeness. When i saw the "reconstruct it" and "take it" in italics i thought off hissing. I saw shadows when i read this poem, a ...

Hehehehe. I like this poem. Its really nice, rhythmic, and totally understandable. Great job :)

Well, I dont know about the orininal, but this is great! The only thing I saw wrong was the line "and the layinbg on the shards of glass, I will ...

Is it just me or is it totally demented that i CHUCKLED while reading this????? Since everyone seemed to beat me here, i will summarize my last five minutes. *nods ...

This is a fantabulischously wonderriffic poem! If someone going through tough times (like me!) Would feel alot of support from this. I love it when people use more complicated words ...

I laughed at your warning, because I am infact an athiest. But since when did that matter? :) there isnt much wrong with this poem, that I see. It is ...

Great idea for a poem! I think you pretty much nailed it. Just two things. when she walks through the school and is abused by the words she attempts to ...

Hey B, its Vee. Oooooookay, review time. Weellll, this poem has a nice theme, a very understandandable and relatable theme. Nitpicks: When you said and tell my friends the damned ...

Omg B, i was thinking the same thing! Thanks guys :)

Here is ME. Miles, moments. Time, tears. Yearning, years. Love, lies. Wishes, why s. Broken hearts, blunders. Here is YOU.

I agree, the poem is really good, but 1) it needs punctuation 2)the rhyming puts on restrictions, so you need to hit the right word. I think you missed once ...