Vonghese

Very nice, good family tension and overall suspense. I was a little disoriented till I read the spoiler, maybe you could mention the date somewhere early in the story? Just ...

I call a son of Ares! Already have the character ready from another role-play that failed utterly on another site, and have been itching to get back to developing his ...

Name: Charles Walker AKA Chad, AKA Wyrda Age (13-18): 17 Appearance: Tall, handsome, with blonde hair and blue eyes. Strong features. Wears black clothing, and a black trench coat with ...

Nice. Aside from some past/present tense confusion, very well written. Just enough detail so we know what is going on, but absolutely no clues as to why, leaving us to ...

Very nice, very well done! I could feel my heart rate rising as I read, always a sign of a good fight scene! I've seen far worse fight scenes in ...

Very funny. I have had to stand at attention for drill sergeants, and you nailed the sadistic tones perfectly. Very well written, you captured their language and attitude like you've ...