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Lydia The fresh air kissed Lydia's cheek as they suggested ideas for escape. "Ok," Griff filled in the leadership role again, "Lydia, Oliver and Dahila, you three go back to ...

I really liked this! Very good. But I was just wondering, is the grandpa a demon then? Also I noticed this: “How’re you going today?” I think you meant: "How ...

Lydia Poor Lydia was fully embarrassed at this point. Her face was redder than a candy apple. All those guys had seen her throw up and it was torture. She ...

I'm game to give this a shot :) Name: Andrew Davis age: Almost 19 Personality: Lives alone and enjoys his job at the skating rink on the outskirts of town. ...

Remember to shorten your sentences, add spacing, and put what people say in ". Like: "I already told you what happened," Mary frowned. Keep up the good work, and remember ...

Very good. I'd really like to see shorter sentances and it a little more broken up. Pretty Crazy did a really good job, make sure you look their review over. ...

Like Tayla said... Some parts I thought could use a little more detail. Very good though. I rather enjoyed it. The ending was a little abrupt I thought. I was ...

Lydia "Throw up!?" she exclaimed, frankly horrified. Kricket put an arm around Lydia. "I think it might be a good idea," she said just loud enough for only her to ...

(Just for argument's sake... Flea (Hero) hasn't been posting at all... maybe Buggy would want to take over? Just a suggestion :wink: )

Lydia Once again the Fox had called them. "Very impressive," their captor smirked through the speaker, "I fully expected at least one of you to have perished. Oh well, there's ...

Lydia "Dahila's right," she reached for an odd shaped piece of wood jutting out of the wall, "Griff, maybe you should stay here with Kricket or something." And before He ...

Lydia She really wasn't liking the idea of splitting up. But at least she was with Griff and the phone. Much safer than the other group. "I want to go ...

Lydia "Guys!" Dahila cried. "There's a door down here!" Griff stopped his hacking for a moment and looked where everyone else was. "She's right," Flea confirmed, falling to his knees ...

Lydia "Looks like we're in some sort of factory," Dahlia spoke, gawking at one particularly odd-looking metal arm. "I didn't know there were any factories around Oakridge," Casey frowned. "How ...

Lydia After everyone was untied, and Griff's arm was relocated, a seemingly broken intercom speaker began to hiss. It's voice filled the entire room with a booming tone. "Hello," the ...