VivielTwixt

Wow. In think this was the best thing I've read on here. No, strike that. This is the best thing I've read on here. I loved that when I was ...

At least 5?

Come on people :( . I'm open.

Granted, but the play ends up a flop and your name becomes strongly associated with it. I wish my story would come to life.

It said I write like J.R.R. Tolkien. Not sure about that.... It said my sister writes like J.D. SAlinger. Now that sounds better.

Nice. Overall, I liked it. Your writing style has potential, but you must pay attention to your grammar. I think when you write, you write too fast to notice what ...

Bring me those worn out first drafts and I'll help you shape them up. At Story Boot Camp, I help stories develop their plot muscles for endurance that will last ...

This story was spooky and weird. If there was a Horror section on YWS, this would definitely be placed there. Actually, since it's about the supernatural I think you can ...

Clever how you made it seem like a wedding when it really was a funeral. I think that's why I didn't really understand or feel the emotions until the end. ...

Nice. I actually enjoyed this, despite the bubbliness of it. It's almost too happy, but I guess that was the point. I loved your descriptions and figurative language (the thing ...

Basically everything that needs to be said was already said. I like this story, but the end was too dramatic. Here's a few nitpicks: “Where is your brother, Samantha? Why ...

Plot I agree with LexiconDevil about having a point to your story. After I finished it, I was like, okay, so the point of this was what? Was anything resolved? ...

Profread your paper. There's a lot of errors, like the misspelled "throughput" in the first sentence and the switching of Stephanie's name to "Sasha" in the second to last paragraph. ...

Thanks. I'm inspired. :D

Chapter 2 finally! Just kidding. You were pretty quick with posting it. I'm a bit late. Now, on with the review. Develop Cerinia more. I agree with the other reviewer ...