VivielTwixt

I'm not really good with historical fiction, but I'll see what I can do, Lena. *Edited* Swimming Against the Kolyma River has graduated. There were some character muscles to shape ...

Blackbird, it's done. 11:58 has graduated and it didn't really need lessons. It just took the test and passed. Smart story. ;)

Hmm. Definitely not what I was expecting. Writing Style You're writing style is strong because it's subtle, and yet straightforward at the same time. The absence flowery language definitely helps ...

Chapter One Against the blackness flickered a single flame into existence. The only light to challenge the darkness, but still not enough. As if they had rehearsed, dozens of tiny ...

Gosh, you're fast. Nice work overall. Writing Style You've kept consistent with your style. That's good. You've also added more descriptions (loved how you described Pelly's hair). You also gave ...

Here I am. Before I start reviewing let me say this, I honestly enjoyed reading your story and I don't say that for every story. The errors you have here ...

Of course, I'll help you. I'm on it right now. Finished. Iceprincess, Empyrosis has just graduated. It was in pretty good shape already, so I didn''t have much work to ...

I disagree with the previous posts, but I'm no poetry buff so what do I know? I'm going to say it anyway. I loved it. It flowed like a song ...

This is beautiful, but too short. They fall in love too quickly and the the readers don't get enough time to understand why Racheal sees sadness in Milen and why ...

This is way too short. Too short to give an overall impression. The only thing I can comment on is the puppet-string thing. The puppet string controls the puppet, so ...

Hey, me again. And the review begins.. You don't need to tell us the last names. You already did that earlier. The girls should freak out more about getting the ...

I agree with Racheal. Delete the Prologue or use it for some sort of blurb. Nice story. Definitely has a catch. The main thing I would change would be when ...

Okay. I'm so confused. Who are these people? Are they her friends? siblings? or something else? And where are they? You're moving too quickly without giving enough background information. Maybe ...

Enigma hit the main points. It seems like you may have an interesting mystery here, but the storytelling needs to improve. Don't describe all her friends in one paragraph. Show ...

Congrats, YWS. We did it.