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Re: Lost for Words chapter 1- A knock to the head
First off, good start! Your main problem was that there were quite a few grammar mistakes. Try slowing down next time. Though many of the people of the planet Aquarius-4 ...
Jan 17, 2008 -
Re: Cancerous Dreams
First off, good poem. Its ideas are very original and interesting. However, the main mistake here is that the reader has no feelings for the woman in the poem. You ...
Jan 16, 2008 -
Re: Silent Harmony - Chapter Two
I liked Chapter Two a lot more than Chapter One. The story is beginning to develop. I thought it was interesting how Forte hated the sound so much. Melody didn't ...
Jan 16, 2008
