VioletSunrise

Wow! This was amazing. I was interested at the first sentence. I wonder what's making Yazra be like this... Not a lot to criticize here. Great work :] I'm excited ...

Haha, I know exactly how you feel. This was really good, and really got me thinking. Awesome job!

First off, good start! Your main problem was that there were quite a few grammar mistakes. Try slowing down next time. Though many of the people of the planet Aquarius-4 ...

Hey thanks! After re-reading it, I can see what you mean by "When will Light come" getting old. I will definetely revise that. Thanks a bunch! :)

Here's something I whipped up last night. __________________________ When will Light come? The world is at rest, The air is dead, The sky is a velvet blanket of nothing. All ...

First off, good poem. Its ideas are very original and interesting. However, the main mistake here is that the reader has no feelings for the woman in the poem. You ...

I really could feel your emotions in this poem. It was really deep, and it spoke to me. I think all the errors are already pointed out; I couldn't find ...

Hey everyone! I'm Valerie, but please call me Val! Just joined this site! It seems cool! I need friends and such. So yeah. Talk to me! Peace

Hey this is my first thing to ever post so keep that in mind when you read this! I need the criticism, so please don't be afraid to tell the ...

I liked Chapter Two a lot more than Chapter One. The story is beginning to develop. I thought it was interesting how Forte hated the sound so much. Melody didn't ...

This was a very good beginning. I found the story easy to follow, but hard to read. Try spacing out the lines. Couldn't find much else wrong with this, you ...