Via

Lo! Death has reared himself a throne Kaffir baby, Kaffir baby, These are the most extraordinary women in the world, Where lies the land to which the ship would go? ...

No I haven't closed it. It just stays up all day. Hmm, good to know!

This isn't really a huge detriment but thought I would share it anyway incase it would help you to know what's going on! Time of Incident (include your timezone): All ...

Seven laughed just a little and glanced back over to Storm, "There isn't a subject I hate more." She took a quick look at the clock...class was supposed to start ...

Oo yay! Thanks! :D

Yes, a little awkward here. And who is Tom and why do we care what he thinks? Via thinks this should probably be in randomness.

Hi Raptured! Welcome to the YWS! Hope you are enjoying it so far! This really isn't too bad. The word choices make it nice to the ear. One thing that ...

Hi TP-- A few things can improve this: 1. Capitalize 'i'. Proper grammar is very important to a piece, be it poetry, fiction, nonfiction, a title of a photograph, a ...

Yes, this is a fiction piece. *moved to Other Fiction*

Hi gg-- A few things will make this better: 1. Capitalize your 'i's and such. Improper grammar, netspeak, etc. will be the first thing to turn people away. 2. Use ...

Hi FITS-- Ofour hit on most of this, so I won't repeat his. But, I will add a few of my own! 1. Punctuation!! I am so fed up with ...

Delainey shrugged. She wasn't really satisfied with the situation, but she soon realized she just didn't care either. She yawned a bit and glanced up to the hallway clock, wondering ...

Chan nodded, "I have a board back in the room. They aren't bad expensive I suppose, I just got mine off a street vendor." She sipped some orange juice before ...

Please Please Please Please Please don't start every line with the same word. Really, it's very obnoxious and it's like making us read a tongue twister. Plus it does nothing ...

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