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"Pumpkin Pie, it's just so viciously disgusting in an icecream fashion. The actual pie however..." -Annah What flavor do you love?

I agree. That part is thrown off a little. I think the problem may be that third line, maybe rephrase it? Also, I'm not really sure if you really meant ...

I'm not very good at critiques of lyrical writing, because i dont have the beat, tone, anything else with it. So, the only advice I can really give you is ...

Haha. I think it's time to admit that you have an obsessive problem with pigs. Maybe we can get you some help! Cute!! :wink:

I like it, too. It's all like....cartoon-like but not at the same time. I love the colors.

I would just take the oval off, if I were you. It would look more professional, in my opinion anyway. Good, though!

Traveling Light This is what you wanted it’s exactly what you dreamed, but it feels like something’s wrong… not as perfect as it seemed. Sometimes you feel like you’re so ...

"I love to draw. I am okay..but I'm getting better. I hope to be a well-known artist one day. There isn't much to do here on this island, I left ...

hey! don't bash my cowboys! My friends and I...we play cowboys and pirates. cops and robbers is so over-rated.

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Oh my goodness...are you kidding me? I lived on his books in school. Everytime we went to the library to get independent reading books, I got an SS book. Now, ...

I'd go Poe. Or ED... oh wait, those weren't options. haha.

Dear writer of doom and gloom, Why the crap can't I be happy?! Why am I stuck with the crappy life--and why did I wait 5 years to fix it...hm? ...

I have to agree that this is very good for a first poem! I'm impressed. However, I also have to mention a few negatives... As previously mentioned, your 'i' in ...