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granted, but because I don't know what that is...you will now grow horns and a snout and oink everytime you start a sentence. I wish I had cooked dinner.

Well, I liked the woe is me line too, it is also mocking--they use it in films now at mocary material. They are equals! haha

Granted, but now they blow. I still wish I had some SoftLips chapstick.

well according to the tale...Shakespeare was both born and died on the same day of the year [years apart...of course]. "William Shakespeare. Born (1564) and died (1616) on the same ...

Granted, but now you have more work to do. I wish I had some SoftLips chapstick.

Our school started at 715. It was horrible, but somehow the attendance rate was always in the mid 90% range. Welcome to the site!

Doesn't that also mean you have the same death day as Shakespeare? Ooo...I'd watch out that day haha.

My first thought on 'emerald blades' was a girl laying on a bed of swords...and I have no idea why haha.

Granted, but only the people from Uptopia. Texas [yes...its an awesome repeat lol]. I wish you could pour grease down the sink without it clogging up the drain.

Granted, but it will only be the people living in Utopia, Texas [population in the low 100's]. I wish my laundry would do itself.

So, you have all these descriptors and then .... that last line. I'm not trying to sound like a jerk but, barf. That last line messes everything up. It's bland, ...

Haha I thought it was fun to stick a random 'Thee' in there! That was awesome, the sarcasm beyond the awesome. Nice! :D Meg

This revised version is much better than the original! Nice revising! But I agree that maybe a little forbodding information would be nice, because if it's read right now the ...

I have to agree with the rhyming critique above. Sometimes it works out okay, but sometimes it doesn't here. Typically when rhyming words...the last letter or two of the words ...

I like the idea behind this. But it seems like you take forever to get to the point. You take several stanza to explain things that have absolutely nothing to ...