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I have to agree with both the linebreaks and the lack of imagery comments. There isn't really anything in here that makes the reader feel doesn't jerk any emotion at ...

the iambic part of this refers to an "unstressed, stressed" read in a poem. For example, from a poem by Emily Dickinson, read this aloud: Because I could not stop ...

Mmm. This...this is not a poem. This is you writing about what you like to do and proclaiming your originality. This is a journal entry or a proclamation to a ...

Granted, but as soon as you finish the edit a gust of wind from the open window blows it outside and down twenty stories for a truck to easily run ...

"No, I don't story-hop...it's too costly to my character. Besides, I have hopped around through the world enough these past few years--I don't need another." -Val If you could be ...

"Yes, actually. She can't decide if Liam and I are supposed to fall in love-at-first-sight or if we are supposed to hate each other first. It's very annoying...because until she ...

Granted, you now write by squeezing an orange. I wish I had the stamina to critique things instead of playing this game.

Granted, but now you have no happy wishes. I wish I could pay attention in class.

Granted, but you take over the world with an incurable plague. I wish I could sleep longer.

Granted, you know posses one penny. I wish I wasn't so confused on where my posts went on this forum..

"I prefer not to answer that, thanks." -Annah "I don't know anymore." -Val "Seeing the look on my childrens' faces on Christmas Morning." -Cole "Having a beautiful family to come ...

"I snapped into a Slim Jim once." -Annah If you could right one wrong in your life, what would it be?

Granted, but on your way there you crash and die. I wish...I had a good wish.

"I don't plan anything. Thinking about the future just gets on my nerves." -Val What part of no don't you understand?