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I also liked the idea here. Also agree that it doesn't exactly read like poetry. But I liked the last few lines the best. May be out of place a ...

It's pretty. Solid photo-journalistic abilities. But it's a little fuzzy...maybe it's the film, or it was a little out of focus. Other than what I see, I know nothing about ...

This is odd. And much like a chant..." Who are we? The Knights! What are we going to do? Win! How are we going to do it ?" ...etc. I ...

You said it yourself: "I sent this letter ". This is a letter, not a poem. Try using some actual poetic elements when you may give you something worthwhile. Good ...

I like the message, as most have said. But you have a few rhythm problems and some rhyming issues. Also, there are a few places that could use a little ...

This is kind of...boring. It's been done a million times and you have not offered any kind of originality or new creativity to make it special. This is more telling ...

I have to agree that I was not particularly fond of this poem either. It's just so...pointless. You kind of think it's supposed to be funny but you don't know ...

I agree as well. I can see where the mother is coming from, but I can also see how idiotic her actions were. However, if Starbucks really does have a ...

Well, I am not fond of all. I feel they lack meaning. So, as far as my haiku expertise goes...this is good. But I don't like the last doesn't make ...

Welcome to YWS! I skimmed over the poem you've posted, it shows definite potential! I'm Meg. Let me know it you need a crit or anything! Otherwise, enjoy the site!

I hate to be harsh--but frankly, this is a rant with strategically placed linebreaks...not a poem. Yea, it's strong...strongly worded, strong references, something most of us can probably relate too--

"In a childish way. Or when they are filled with paint and attacked with darts." -Annah What did you do for your last birthday?

I second that in a slightly disturbing manner.

"Because my writer has nothing else to occupy her time with. ...even though she COULD be getting me off this damn sidewalk! :x " -Cole Were you named after anyone?

I basically just know him from America's Sweethearts [the movie...of course]. I drew it from a magazine cover; I'm not like a Cusack diehard fan or anything haha. Thanks!