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It's sounds like an amazing beginning in a novel or short story...or short novel. I really like the idea, very much. But, as this stands now it's too short really ...

1 or 4!

I'll agree with most the others. This definitely has drama in it, though I feel that it's more of a memoir writing piece than a poem, though in a few ...

Ha! We used to do that with the fan in the living room when we were younger. Unfortunately, it's directly above a slab of tiles and a metal fireplace (surrounded ...

"On the island. That way I'd have the trees and the beach and the springs there are sure to be somewhere with clean water for bathing and swimming and such. ...

That's right, it's time for halloween! My favorite part? Carving the pumpkin. ...don't look at me like that, you know you love it too! I will probably carve pumpkins until ...

I like odd names, that really aren't odd but they are odd for the gender. But, now Clau, the specific setting of the story plays in quite often. I have ...

Heck yes, halloween!

I'll second the shoulderness. But, the rest of it is actually very well done! What pen type did you use?

it meant to be poetry? If it is, or if it isn't, let me know. I will move it if necessary! =]

Hmm...this, does not go here...*waits for proper mod to move it*

I watch 'NEXT' and 'elimidate' when there is nothing else on, even though I frown upon MTV with all my might. I often wonder where they find those people. It's ...

I get the point, and it actually does seem interesting, but there are a few issues with the piece. First, I will second/third/fourth what everyone else has said. I will ...

6/10 mmm, I'm assuming it's an inside joke?

8.5/10 So true.