Ventomology

Ugh. This entire section is just a mess. It follows a number of action scenes though, and mostly functions as cool down and regrouping. Thanks for the review!

Ugh. This entire section is just a mess. It follows a number of action scenes though, and mostly functions as cool down and regrouping. Thanks for the review!

Ah, yes. Making snarky comments about my characters is what I live for. As for the paragraphs... I've received this so many times and still can't seem to get it ...

I have done nicknames, but that was with a different narrator who has seen this blonde woman more often. I guess I should be a bit more free with name-calling. ...

I've heard a number of people also advise on not using titles for named characters. Perhaps there is a balance somewhere in the middle for me to find. Anyways, I'll ...

Twelve? Really? Oh dear... that's probably not the impression I was going for. I've always thought the words 'teen' and 'teenager' sounded kind of weird in my writing, so I ...

I would use the magic excuse, but when I think about it, the feather thing probably can be interpreted both ways and still be fairly accurate. This scene is being ...

1. You know, my dad is actually very good at telling different ethnic groups of Asians apart. It's kind of interesting, especially since he's my white parent. Did I tell ...

You'd be surprised at how much weirdness goes unnoticed on a busy bus or subway. As for Divinity's request to play in the snow, I'm fairly sure it's been mentioned ...

Haha! I worked on the school newspaper last year, and believe me, that ink gets around. I'll fix the dialogue thing when I'm not dying from stress, and sorry for ...

Hmm... I will find some way to fix that night vision thing. You learn new things, eh? As for point three, I have a challenge for you. Look up the ...

I like to think that Martin has always had grace in him, but he didn't want to embrace it. Besides, he does pull on Divinity's hair at the end, and ...

Haha! This week's chapter is basically the explanation-overload, which is poor planning on my part, but it needed to be done. Anyways, I've fixed the first two notes, but it ...

Oh, but Hunter, I have switched perspectives mid-chapter before. I even went full omniscient in a few cases. As for point 5, I am glad you picked up on the ...

Ugh... I can't believe I made all those gross mistakes. Thanks for catching them!