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Re: Thorne: Chapter One
Your hooker deserves an A++! It's so mysterious! Now to brass tacks: The premise is intriguing, but it needs a little more oomf to really stand out. Describe what Thorn ...
Oct 30, 2013 -
Re: The Snow: Chapter 1
Wow! The idea is very exciting! I will remind you to start a new paragraph whenever someone begins speaking, and there were a few spots where I think a comma ...
Oct 29, 2013
