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  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: Thorne: Chapter One

    Your hooker deserves an A++! It's so mysterious! Now to brass tacks: The premise is intriguing, but it needs a little more oomf to really stand out. Describe what Thorn ...

    Oct 30, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Snow: Chapter 1

    Wow! The idea is very exciting! I will remind you to start a new paragraph whenever someone begins speaking, and there were a few spots where I think a comma ...

    Oct 29, 2013


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