Ventomology

Yay! Hello there, official LMS contestant. Anyway, I found a typo somewhere in here. You misspelled 'servant' when Devon was talking about taking girls to his bed. There were also ...

HELLO! Very nice. I must say, this might be better than the last one. There is very little to complain about, just some trivial little things. First, why would a ...

Heya Iggs! I can't believe this is still in the GR. You'd think someone might come in and compliment you sooner. Anyways, onwards! For grammar, there's nothing to report! (Except ...

Heya! I didn't read the prologue (I should) but let's get rolling, shall we? For grammar, there's like, two nitpicks I found. The first one is verb tense consistency: "Her ...

As requested, Buggie is here to review! Now then, for grammar there are a few mistakes I noticed, mostly with syntax. They can be easily straightened out by a quick ...

Hello there! I should have reviewed this sooner, since it's been in the GR for a while, but I was lazy... Now then, like Moo before me, I do like ...

Hello there, and before I forget, welcome to YWS! As a precaution, I will warn you that I'm somewhat harsh with reviewing. Onwards, then. First, and this is just a ...

Heyo! Welcome to YWS, Sabrina! (Just as a warning, I'm quite harsh as a reviewer.) Anywho, grammar first: Remember that whenever a new person speaks, their dialogue is given a ...

Woo hello, Fort! It would appear that I have beaten your trusty Sage to the prize. Anyway, no real grammar issues. Not that I found, anyway. I think towards the ...

Oh my gosh I love it! Carter's such a little sweetie pie (even if he's got a wild streak). Now then, onto the review! Grammar-wise, I didn't see anything obvious. ...

Oh my. Things are certainly getting strange for our dear heroine, aren't they? Anywho, first things first: No grammar mistakes. Not that I could tell, anyway. Only thing I would ...

Hey hey! I'm back! Uh, there are a few places where the verb tenses are a little weird. Might want to check through that. Also, and this was only in ...

Yay, hello! I can't believe I didn't catch this and the second chapter earlier. Silly me! Anywho, as far as grammar goes, there are just a few random typos and ...

Hello there! I hope you're having a wonderful review day, Katngo! And onwards to the review: No grammar mistakes, at least nothing I caught. There was a consistency issue regarding ...

Hey Fort! It's me! Anywho, here goes the review. First off, no obvious grammatical errors. I think some of the dialogue where you interrupt speaking with action could be rephrased. ...