Ventomology

Yo! Let's see if I can claim this one for a review, eh? Now then, like Jared said, you did have some trouble with grammar. I think a lot of ...

Yo! I'm back! First off: some typo-thingies. However, as her vision cleared and became accustomned to the enveloping darkness- almost resembling a galloping horse made of lightening her crips and ...

Hmmm... Much better. Thank you. First, nitpicks: “Lots of cuts and bruises. They should fine though.” You can figure this one out on your own. Even though these injuries weren’t ...

Yo! I'm back! Anyways, since you did such a fantastic job with this one, all I have for you are some little nitpicks: They had been waiting for the demolition ...

Yay! Messy, thank you SO much. So anyways, lots of typos, actually. I expect better from you! I'll let other people go into detail on those though. (The biggest one ...

Whew... two days and you're already this active? I'd better see you mentioned in Squills. Anyways, no grammatical errors, at least, none I could see. Which means I get to ...

Splutters nonsense about death HOW COULD YOU, MESSY? YOU AWFUL PERSON! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS TO CASTOR AND KALAN AND EVERYONE! Anyways, I caught a few typos, the ...

My goodness... I suppose you really live up to your username, don't you? Now, I think Birkhoff down there got most of the grammar errors, but some of them are ...

Yo! Thanks for offering to swap with me! Anyways, like Swiftfur said before me, there are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes lying around here. One of the best ...

Yo! Buggie here for a review. Anyway, some nitpicks: I don't think the parenthesis thing at the end is necessary. It takes us out of this world and it's legends, ...

Yo, Losty! Since JC down there did most of the technical work, I guess I get to just do plot and characters. HOORAY! Oh, but there's this one thing first: ...

Hmm... Where is your sage? I would have expected them to come around by now. Anyways, there is a typo in the third-to-last paragraph. You misspelled recognize. (Why in the ...

I'm back! Now then... My only grammar comments are these two: You often forget to use a question mark when someone uses that question to express shock or some other ...

And this is why I hate shopping. I wanted to be first to read this. Anyways... First, a few nitpicks: his shoes were rather new: it seemed Replace the colon ...

Ooh... gods and blessings. Things are going to get antsy! Now then... My biggest comment is for the descriptions. You use so much 'was' to describe things. Try using personification; ...