Ventomology

Hey there Radrook! I don't review poetry a whole lot, but I'm aiming for blue star #1, and the title of this piece totally grabbed my attention. I hope I ...

To be fair to Twynk, herbivorous teeth are in fact designed for crushing. Carnivorous teeth are designed for tearing. I've changed the review scheme a little bit since I last ...

Eugh please no cousin marriages. That's a recipe for disease. Technical Comments: 1. Uh, this one is just a suggestion and not really a you-did-a-thing-wrong kind of comment: I know ...

Ah, so this is Team C. Do they have a proper name like the Confederacy? Will they get one? They should, because it's easier to keep track of teams if ...

I'm just gonna skip the technical comments because I saw a thing and had to comment on it before I forgot: 1. I'm sorry. Did you name a character Pfanxi? ...

Alrighty! Let's get down to business (to defeat the huns). Technical Comments: For some reason, the wording of the dialogue in this scene felt kinda off. There were a few ...

Yo! It is Tuesday, and I think my mom is going to drag me out shopping, so I don't know how many chapters I'll get reviewed today. Technical Comments: 1. ...

Okay, so not as exciting as some of the other chapters, but no less important. Let's get down to business. Technical Comments: I actually can't figure out why it is, ...

Hey! Happy Review Day! Let's get this party started, shall we? Technical Comments: 1. I feel like, despite having a really good grasp on what's going on action-wise, I know ...

... Is it life you want back? Uhh, if this were an English paper, I'd probably write all the evidence to support that answer, but for now we'll just treat ...

Heey. I may or may not be procrastinating on a paper I have to write for class. Technical Comments: This is like a teeny tiny nitpick, but your writing is ...

Hey there! The title of this piece really caught my eye, so I thought I'd give it a whirl. Fair warning: I haven't reviewed poetry in a long while. Forgive ...

Hey yo! I'm gonna hit this review today so that tomorrow I won't use this as an excuse to put off my architecture homework even more. Technical comments: 1. You ...

That's one way to turn things around. Also a very nice way to conclude the chapter. It feels like the end of the beginning, I would say. Technical Comments: 1. ...

...Well then. That happened?? Technical Comments: 1. For some reason, this chapter has a lot more helping verbs and 'was's than the others. Or maybe I just noticed more of ...