Ventomology

Hey! I'm back! It only took me like a week. Technical Comments: 1. You probably don't need to label things as "extra chapters" to be honest. The word "extra" sort ...

Hey! I know I promised to pop up around here sooner. Sorry about that. Let's dive right in, shall we? Technical Comments: 1. Just a little nitpicky thing. I don't ...

Yo. I'm a little bit confused by Eremia fainting again, but I'll let that slide. This whole scene feels like the kind of thing that will be quickly explained. Technical ...

Yo! I finally pulled myself out of the back-to-school blues, and here I am to review. Technical Comments: 1. You probably don't want to open the section with the word ...

Wow okay. So the name Peter has definitely popped up before, and that's a little concerning. But I'll get back to that, I guess. Technical Comments: 1. Since this is ...

Shame that this stuff is sitting in the GR. Let's go! Technical Comments: 1. I should have mentioned this, but you have some pretty solid dialogue! There's good diversity in ...

Hello there! I'm back! Let's cut to the chase, yeah? Technical Comments: 1. I think you could benefit from a little more diversity of sentence length. There were times during ...

Heya! This is Buggie. I'm sorry I haven't read the rest of your story here, but I hope I can help a bit regardless. Technical Comments: 1. So you mention ...

Heya! It's pretty cool to see a novel floating around with some sports! I actually used to play basketball, but I'm pretty short and can't catch rebounds, so I had ...

Hello! This was an interesting read. The 'you' and 'I' thing isn't something I tend to see in long-format literature, so I was intrigued. Technical Comments: It looks like LMAuthor ...

Hello and happy Review Day! I'll just jump right in, if that's all right. So, I notice that this is listed as satire, but while I know which cliche you're ...

Hello! I have returned. Let's just nose dive right in? Technical Comments: 1. Again, a lot of telling here. I know it's a continuation of the worldbuilding you had going ...

Hello! I don't review poetry all that often, but hopefully I'll spout out at least one or two helpful things. Nitpicks: 1. I find it odd that in the first ...

Oof, sorry I didn't get to this sooner! I was caught up in exams, and then winter festivities, and then I saw 1.3 in the Green Room and remembered to ...

Oh, but past midnight is the best time for heart-to-hearts. Silly Max. Happy review day, ellasnotebook! Let's get down to business, shall we? Technical Comments: 1. Ugh I love indentation. ...