Velvet

Hello Evi! My imediate thoughts after finishing reading your story (part 1 at least) were on how entertaining your words were, and how the pacing was just right - not ...

Hello MikaFreak123! I have a few things I can comment on regarding your story, but please know that these are some very subjective observations - more than telling you what ...

At first this was reading to me like a monologue by a husband who was obsessed on getting his wife back; it looked like she had abandoned him and he ...

For me, what works best in this piece is the first paragraph, which opens a series of possibilities as it plays with the concepts of heat and cold, light and ...

Hello Fireweed, This is a very interesting story: it tells of revolution and the spirit necessary to pursuit a rebellion that will make changes we want in our lives. I ...