Vasticity

I like this work, but you don't capatilize each beginning line, and you don't use punctuations, just like Mizzle made clear. :( Also, there were a few places where it ...

Well, you have the talent. Keep writing. You use a lot of detail and description, so I can actually see the place that you're writing about, which is a flaw ...

Due to a drop in actors, I had to rewrite. 3 Characters have been taken from the film. SCAVENGERS (Scene Two) (We fade in to a first-person shot of a ...

Due to a sudden drop in actors, I had to rewrite. 3 characters have been taken from the film. SCAVENGERS (SCENE ONE) (We open to an empty field, wind rushing ...

Timepiece (SCENE FOUR) (We cut to Brian and Charles walking up towards the door. Brian opens the door and is about to step out, but he turns around to face ...

Timepiece (scene three) (We open to Jeff, sitting on the couch, drinking a glass of water, with James and Charles standing in front of him) Charles: What is the big ...

wow. Wow, just... wow. This is exceedingly heartfelt and better than most of the books that i've read or written. I am, as of this moment, resisting the urge to ...

yeah, I screwed up the blood thing, so i'm going to cut that out. But... and i've done a lot of research on this, patients will commonly pass out if ...

Kill him. Punch him. Stab him in the right eye with a 12cm serrated butchers knife, the kind mum used to slice everything. Grab the bat, hit him down again ...

I'm still accepting all criticisms and approvals. So give me more, MORE! Scene two (We fade in from black to Jeff, staring blandly. The camera turns around to see what ...

This is a good book, but there are areas that you can improve. First of all, “You’re late, as usual,” irrelevant. Get rid of it. Second of all, I liked ...

First of all, well done. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Expand the story, and reveal your characters, and I'll be very entertained. Well done. Keep writing. :elephant:

I would be interested to hear what kind of music would be playing while this happened. um... orchestral music. I'm a composer, so i'm going to write it, after the ...

Thank you!!! I wasn't really expecting any approvals... :lol:

I'm accepting all criticisms and approvals. Please note that I do not write books, I'm more into movie scripts. Since there isn't really a section for that, I've decided to ...