Vasticity

Hi! I agree with Arrish. It seems very different and interesting. I also agree with here on the yellow-background thing. Maybe you can have sort of yellow around the heart, ...

The angle that you took the picture at is very good, because above, there's a very bright light coming from the roof. It's almost like heaven or something like that. ...

You do a good job with this poem, with a good beat, etc. But you seem to be fading in and out from rhyming to not rhyming, so that confuses ...

Nice. As vox said, I love the concept. But, maybe you could make it a bit longer, and get rid of the punctuation and spelling errors. Then it'd be perfect! ...

I like the colors, and the picture itself, but the quality of the actual picture is a little low, unfortunately. Other than that it's a great picture. It's a little ...

GIVE ME MORE!!! Such anticipation and suspense. Lots of action! Which is what I like. Unfortuneately, you'll never be as action-packed as me. Just joking. (But you won't.) :backtotopic: Okay, ...

this is a nice poem, very dark and grim. I like it. :D This is the type of thing I write, but I interpret it in movies. It seems like ...

First off, I agree with everything that lily said. (What's the point of repeating what she said? :? ) Second off, this is not a script. If this were a ...

I can see the story you're portraying with this, which is a sad one, obviously, and a story very frequently portrayed in the media. I like it, but the beat ...

This was really interesting, with nice structuring and a good beat. I can't find anything really bad with it, so this isn't much of a review. But anyway, I recommend ...

This is my least favorite scene from the whole thing, so I need any helpful critiques. ERADICATION (Scene Five) (We fade in from black to Marc Green, who is reading ...

ERADICATION (Scene Four) (We cut to Keith, who is sitting on a chair, in a dimly-lit room, reading a book. He reaches over, and pulls a cell-phone from a table. ...

Well, here's your first rule-don't use so many caps. :D And, I too, am teaming with dark and horrifying secrets, except I don't hide them with a fake personality. You ...

I know this seems really short, but when the movie actually comes out, it's a lot longer than it seems. Just review what you can. :mrgreen: ERADICATION (Scene Three) (We ...

Wow. I hope you aren't basing this on personal expierience. :smt088 They say write what you know, but I wouldn't want to know this. Anyway, there's an issue with your ...