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Thank you everyone. I appreciate all critiques and opinions. :-) To clear up a few things, I had intended this to be a short piece. Although both characters in it ...

Thanks to both of you for critiquing my work. I have read your suggestions and applied those that I also agreed with. I greatly appreciate all and any advice. Thanks! ...

Just a couple reviews would be appreciated. I'd like to improve the above piece.

Will do. And, thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

[NOTE. Another random clipping from the same story. Not sure where I'm going to slip it in. Bee or Barbie is the pink haired girl Glen saw at the bus-stops. ...

Thanks again, everyone! I really apprecaite the critiques and comments. Keep them coming. Also I have just edited to make the alterations and corrections suggested that I agreed with (... ...

Thanks, guys. Really appreciate it. It is a oneshot. And was written for a writer's craft course I'm taking. I've never thought of turning it into a script but my ...

I guess if I were to draw answers from my real life experiance. Her parents tried to contact her later after she spent some time away in the Kingdom of ...

thanks!

He proposed that she return with him to stay the following week at his castle in the Kingdom of Wealth. She should contact her parents, she thought, but what would ...

Thank you X4. I appreciate and comments and crit. Thanks.

From the Author: It feels like there is something missing from this intro. Anyone have any ideas? Introduction And I felt it in my heart, the beginning had come and ...

Thank you. So much! I really do need lots of grammer revision and I appreciate any you could give. I have rated it 'R' or 'M' or something of the ...

Personally, I like it the way it is. It's sort of an awkward and sharp twist but just because that wasn't what I was expecting. I do think Sirius and ...

Ouch. I actually did work pretty hard on this. The only thing I was unable to fix, which bothers me, is the ryhming. Oww.