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Re: Eyes Wide Shut 3.1 (Edited)
Utopia Dreamworld here, This situation has become a whole lot more intense. I like how we didn't really think about the terrorists before you brought them in, and now were ...
Jul 10, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 2.3 (Edited)
Utopia Dreamworld here, So now Avril has completed her old mission, find Noami, she must complete her new mission, find her parents. Only, this mission seems a little more impossible. ...
Jul 7, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 2.2 (Edited)
Utopia Dreamworld here, Huge surprise, does this chapter even belong to the same book as the last one? This story has taken a whole different turn! Your first version was ...
Jul 7, 2014 -
Re: The Leaping, Black-Clad Lords and the Portal [2] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Utopia dreamworld here, Just like I said last review, you really showed that Mrs. Claus' intentions were not evil,, and the scales was a really nice way of showing that. ...
Jun 29, 2014 -
Re: The Leaping, Black-Clad Lords and the Portal [1] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Utopia Wonderland here, I really like where this story is going and can't wait to see it as a whole. I'm curios as to see what Maria will think of ...
Jun 29, 2014 -
Re: The Mad, Made-up Milking Maids (Part 1) [Twelve Days Before Christmas] *Edited*
Utopia yellow brick road here, Your chapters are getting really creative! Who would come up with evil milk and freaky maids. I like how you've switched it, so now Maria ...
May 30, 2014 -
Re: Masks
Utopia Dreamworld here, I really like how you portray the masks; as armor for protection against pain or emotion, as something unique that defines who you are or to cover ...
May 30, 2014 -
Re: The Mad, Made-up Milking Maids (Part 2) [Twelve Days Before Christmas] *Edited*
Utopia yellow brick road here, I loved part 2! I was kind of wondering why, in the first part, you started talking about stitches and clothe making but now I ...
May 30, 2014 -
Re: Isn't it beautiful? (spoken)
Utopia day-dream here, I like the idea of the poem and the repetition. Poems were you can create an image in your head are always good ones. There were a ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: Eyes Wide Shut 1.1 (Edited)
Utopia make believe here, For some reason, I never imagined the main character as a blonde. I always saw her with brown or black hair. It took a while to ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: Shadow
Utopia dreamworld here, This is an amazing passage, the story-line is well thought through and I like the way you described how the shadow has to follow her and how ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: In the Beginning (Part 0) [Twelve Days Before Christmas] *Edited*
Utopia fairy world here, Í love where this story is going and I can't wait to read more! Let's start with the nitpicks first so this review can end on ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: The Undead, Golden, Angry Birds [Part 2] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Utopia over the rainbow, here I love where this is going! This is just as good as the last chapter! Does Ben always have to save her though, it's like ...
Mar 18, 2014 -
Re: The Undead, Golden, Angry Birds [Part 1] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Utopia fairyland here, This story-line has become author worthy! Where have you come up with these amazing plots? Cliff hangers are good ideas in this case because the child while ...
Mar 18, 2014 -
Re: French Hens and the Spirit (Part 3 Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Utopia Wonderland here, Great story-line. I love how we are slowly getting to know the reason for the war and why Maria is actually there. Like I said previously, remember ...
Mar 18, 2014