Unfinite

Hey, first things first, a pretty good story from what I read. True to your description it's fast-paced and well-written. First qualm, if I'm not mistaken you've written a story ...

"They are the goons", replied the old man rather unwillingly. Comma needs to be before the speech mark. - "goons," He looked straight in the map, trying to figure out ...

Chapter one- The enterance entrance The trees incased encased the small girl, and the voices continued to fill her head, with lies and total uncertainty. Morgana consider putting a period/full ...

I liked the story, very few spelling or grammar mistakes. My only criticism was a fact that took me really out of the flow of the story; after being impaled ...

I liked the story itself, it seemed to be really well written. You should have more faith in yourself, this story is really quite good, especially for your first post. ...