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The next chapter of THIOBS is nearly finished. "All Flesh Is Grass". If you ever need to write a whipping scene, then the lash first makes a weal on the ...

He was probably apart of Hitler's Children or whatever it was called. Hitler Youth? As soon as I find out, I'll send you the author, Clau. I think there was ...

You can try showing how the character enjoys causing pain. Emphasize his glee at hurting them. That's more like being sadistic. Hatred has been compared to like a slow fire. ...

I must be some sort of freak: I love research (and character development, and editing). You're not a freak, I'm just the same!

Here's tense-skipping: "Samuel...," Father said, shaking me gently, and jolting me out of my thoughts. Past, good. "I will," I shout, hurrying, pumping my legs to their full exstent. Present. ...

Hmm, that quote was good, but a few things: you skip tenses, and I really think you should change "Mum" to "Mother". It don't feel right. ^_^ The Sons of ...

Good! I'll keep all this in mind. NOT that I write horror, but this could be helpful in writing other scenes. Where does the title come from? Shakespeare? (random guess)

Yes, don't give up on it! ^_^ If there's any specific part you want help on, then I could give you another opinion.

Finally! My Duel Entry, and the first appearance of the Changers is up! Namely, here, :roll: This only has Falcon and Dolphin in it, and it goes waaaaay back, to ...

Mary Jones. Our topic for this evening. We once read a book about Mary Jones - the girl who saved up for six years to buy a Bible. A good ...

where is Scarab? after reading your rants, i want to read it now. In my 'folio. :D What's up now may be very different from the finished result, but comments ...

I'll keep these in mind if I ever write a romance... :D I once vowed that none of my characters would ever have romantic attatchments, and while I still avoid ...

Both. :roll: :wink: :D

If you could, then, yes. :D Comments on anything and everything - then I can keep them in mind for the next draft.

=) Scarab is back on track. Do I laugh or hit something? :roll: :smt017 :smt043 :smt021 Gee, I'm glad I didn't attempt Psychology GCSE. Trying to study my brain would ...