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6/10 -- S'arite, but how do horses gleam, and why do they only neigh in the dark? :? 10/10 -- I think it's "magnificent"?

Hi! On YWS, a rule is that you review at least two pieces of work before you post any of your own, and review twice as much as you post ...

‘Someone’s gonna be miserable sometime. Accept it. That’s how I stay so happy.’ Enter to have your piece prodded, poked at, jabbed with sharp pointy objects, diagnosed and cured. As ...

First chapter. Please be as harsh as possible about everything, but mainly about the characters. Thanks! :D

Title: The Kingdom is Departed (chapter one) Genre: Fantasy/alternate history Link: Thanks! :D

Hi! This wasn't nearly as good as your first chapter. This was rushed. You never slowed down to take a breath and properly describe things! Run this through a spell-checker ...

Hi! This was really interesting! I thought at first that was going to be about Marie who modelled for Degas's dancer model, but she had a different name. Or is ...

Io! It was bitter cold out two weeks ago when I began this project. So, does this mean that it was cold two weeks after you began the project, or ...

The Kingdom is Departed [1] First chapter, please? :D It's ALTERNATE HISTORY. *hides*

The Kingdom is Departed [1] Comments about everything, but mostly about the characters, please. And whether it works a first chapter. :D

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Chapter One Shadow Tattybogle was quite certain of two things. Firstly, Mistress had chosen a hopelessly uncoordinated dance partner. Second, the man in the corner was going to kill someone. ...

"Mousies! Mousie mousie mousie mousie mousie mousie mousie! Moist mouse!" ~Shadow "Ugh. *shudders* I don't like mice." ~Alarise "I remember when I was little, there was a mouse who lived ...

Carrie was really, really good. Cujo took too long to get to the point. :P Io. Come and do YWS. :D

"That boy in the rhyme. Johnny Stout, because he pulled Pussy out." ~Shadow "Gandalf would be fun, or Superman, because of all their powers, and Gandalf is a little like ...