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Re: Rate the Signature Above You [3]
6/10 -- S'arite, but how do horses gleam, and why do they only neigh in the dark? :? 10/10 -- I think it's "magnificent"?
Mar 14, 2009 -
Re: Short Story-Promise
Hi! On YWS, a rule is that you review at least two pieces of work before you post any of your own, and review twice as much as you post ...
Mar 13, 2009 -
Re: The Clinic
‘Someone’s gonna be miserable sometime. Accept it. That’s how I stay so happy.’ Enter to have your piece prodded, poked at, jabbed with sharp pointy objects, diagnosed and cured. As ...
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: A review from one upon whom lies a desire to please.
First chapter. Please be as harsh as possible about everything, but mainly about the characters. Thanks! :D
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: MV's Mystical/Awesome Reviews!
Title: The Kingdom is Departed (chapter one) Genre: Fantasy/alternate history Link: Thanks! :D
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: Chapter 2 of Ballerina *edited* 2/4/09
Hi! This wasn't nearly as good as your first chapter. This was rushed. You never slowed down to take a breath and properly describe things! Run this through a spell-checker ...
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: "Ballerina" The first Chapter (edited)
Hi! This was really interesting! I thought at first that was going to be about Marie who modelled for Degas's dancer model, but she had a different name. Or is ...
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: Proctor (Draft II)
Io! It was bitter cold out two weeks ago when I began this project. So, does this mean that it was cold two weeks after you began the project, or ...
Mar 12, 2009 -
Re: You Know You Want Some [re-opened]
The Kingdom is Departed [1] First chapter, please? :D It's ALTERNATE HISTORY. *hides*
Mar 11, 2009 -
Re: Clo Needs You!
The Kingdom is Departed [1] Comments about everything, but mostly about the characters, please. And whether it works a first chapter. :D
Mar 11, 2009 -
Re: Speedwrite the word above you!
Silver
Mar 11, 2009 -
Re: The Kingdom is Departed [1]
Chapter One Shadow Tattybogle was quite certain of two things. Firstly, Mistress had chosen a hopelessly uncoordinated dance partner. Second, the man in the corner was going to kill someone. ...
Mar 11, 2009 -
Re: Character Answer Game [2]
"Mousies! Mousie mousie mousie mousie mousie mousie mousie! Moist mouse!" ~Shadow "Ugh. *shudders* I don't like mice." ~Alarise "I remember when I was little, there was a mouse who lived ...
Mar 10, 2009 -
Re: Smell that Fresh College Dropout Scent! mmmm!
Carrie was really, really good. Cujo took too long to get to the point. :P Io. Come and do YWS. :D
Mar 10, 2009 -
Re: Character Answer Game [2]
"That boy in the rhyme. Johnny Stout, because he pulled Pussy out." ~Shadow "Gandalf would be fun, or Superman, because of all their powers, and Gandalf is a little like ...
Mar 6, 2009