Twit

10/10 I like it, it sets up the scenario, acts as a hook and gives us a bit of character development all at once. The sun was rising over the ...

"Boiled." ~Thaw "Boiled, I suppose." ~Wuthering "I don't like eggs." ~Josiah Scroggins "Neither do I." ~Richard Makepeace Sunset or sunrise?

Dizzy.

That was really helpful, thanks Rosie! Pace is something I'm always worrying about, but the idea of thinking about it like a dance -- that's really neat.

Hai! :mrgreen: I missed the second chapter, but I've read the first one, so I'm interested to see how the story's going... So far I like it, although my point ...

Hai! I'm Twit, back from the dead to review your story. :smt004 On a side note, could you make your chapters shorter? Only this took up, like, five pages of ...

Hey! Could you review a pome, please? It's, like, a million years old and needs work, so... The Mad Psychiatrist Did I even spell that right? :shock:

O hai. :mrgreen: First of all, your spacing is off. You need to leave a line between each paragraph and each line of dialogue, so: Grammy smiled. “That’s not all ...

Hey Tatra! My name is Twit and I shall be your reviewer for today. :mrgreen: ~ Instead of peeling it, he just fiddled with it as he looked over to ...

1st one: Meh, never heard of it, 2/10. 2nd one: 10/10, love that song! Best part of the film...

Creeping, crawling, licking and leaping, with each small thing it ate its hunger grew. I think you should either have a semi-colon or start a new sentence after "leaping", and ...

Hai! :) First off – hu-uge paragraph! I know everyone else has already said that, but it’s a very important thing – first impressions and all that – so do ...

A Crime Against Humanity? Gee, that's a little strong. It's a film , not a rewriting of the Bible. The Alice books are some of my favourites, so I was ...

First off, I don't know why it does not show it but I have reviewed other peoples work. Possibly it's because your reviews weren't long or detailed enough. You have ...

From thereon , I experienced severe harassment, mostly because I was a homosexual. This doesn’t seem like quite the right phrase. “From that moment on” would flow better, I think. ...