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Hi! Twit here to do the reviewin' thing. Woah, dude, first off—spacing! Leave a line between each new paragraph and each line of dialogue, otherwise all I see is one ...

Hai! This was very good; you handled awkward emotions well without overloading into sappitude. There were a few places, however, where I felt your technique was a little off: Strawberries ...

It’s the silence that you pull around you while you check your emails, the silence that makes a goldfish bowl around you while you sit and knit. My chatter is ...

Hey! You have an excellent title for drawing people (well, me) in, and I love the idea of a moonboy and a stargirl, but I don't get what you're trying ...

Hi! I'm not sure what you were trying to communicate here -- at first I thought the fence was civilisation, preventing people from being themselves, but then you introduced the ...

Hey! I liked this poem a lot; it had a good, relevant message with simple, understandable imagery. However, I think that that may work against it as well. Personally, I ...

Hai! :mrgreen: I sat in the corner and watched quietly . The man in the red cloak stood there solemnly , doing nothing. Personally, I don’t like having two adverbs ...

I was late for rounds. Again. Doctor O’Connor had already started by the time I caught up with him. He was lecturing his group of interns on a woman admitted ...

"Me mother told me I were talkin' afore I were walkin', but I don't know 'ow old I were." ~Wuthering "I don't know, I don't remember." ~Thaw "I really don't ...

Lol, interesting and very complicated scenario... Thaw would think it extremely selfish of the Agency to wipe her memories just because she was too cool to handle and extremely silly ...

"Cut them off. I'd never forgive them if they betrayed me like that." ~Thaw "I'd be upset that our friendship had gone. I don't know if I'd forgive them -- ...

A teen fiction story about a teenager whose life goes skewiff. It doesn't really say that much, other that something bad'll happen. It's not that interesting, and I probably wouldn't ...

"That something will happen to the baby." ~Thaw "I don't know; something bad about Thaw." ~Wuthering "That they'll find me, I suppose. Quite basic, really; almost cliched. Only then I'll ...

9/10 Cool! It's a great hook and I'd definitely read on. I don't know though, it's a little impersonal, which is why only the 9 and not a full 10. ...

Title: Wolfsbane, Mustard-seed and Silver Genre: Fantasy/alternate history Link: Please be as harsh as possible! :D