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I know nix about the American Civil War, but this is a good story, and the ending was a shock! I'm glad you put that in tho, because things like ...

Weird,that.I've met ( okay,encountered and heard about ) JWs,but they wern't nutters like this at all,just sad,because they're following the wrong path.Maybe this bloke was an odd case.

Bit start with what exactly IS an autistic person?Is Mr Time a watch or something?Have to confess...I was muddled by the end of it. :oops: :?

Pretty odd subject...what was his actual condition and why was everyone avoiding him?Something contagious?I wish you'd explained that a bit more,but the last sentance sums it up : "He began ...

I thought that this was good,but a few sentances didn't read that well,and I wasn't too sure if the grammer was strictly...gramatical. "not too hot that the heat permeated every ...

well,I did mean to repeat was that sort of thing.

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A bit confusing...I read it through several times and still didn't quite get it.Maybe that's just me being dense?

The last verse was very good,but if you had varied the first verses it would have been better. Just a little too repetitive,that's all.

This was very thought provoking...the rhyming was good as well.Good! 8)

Hi y'all I'm new...(well,like DUH ;-)...) I'm ShadowTwit,I'm 15,want to write,like to read,yet am unable to look at my own works with an unbiased eye.Maybe people here can help me ...