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You could space this out, add spaces between dialogue. In fact, I think you NEED to do this. Nick ran, and ran, thinking, “Hey there, flea-brained dolt! You forgot the ...

It does sound restrictive - the Bible Belt, I mean, the way you put it. It's funny, quite a few people on here have said that this seems to be ...

Well, I can't say as I remember you, cos I'm a recent addition here, myself...but anyways, hi! I'm the Twit, so don't take anything I say seriously - except in ...

" Na, na ! It could be division among the people in the country, or two potentially brilliant rulers fighting with each other to determine which one should rule. Or ...

Black hair, and being short.Too short - it's such a disadvantage. What is your happiest memory?

Hi Night Mistress! Hope ya have a good time here on YWS. :D If you look at the various threads and forums, you'll soon pick up the hang of it ...

Ow, confusing in some places, but Helen/Lily was a schizo-whatsit, right? Multiple personalities? It was well written, but the dialogue made it a bit confusing in some places before I ...

A delicate poem about love, or the contents of someone's dresser drawers or dresser top. Whalesong.

I'm really enjoying this! Sorry, I know we're supposed to crit and be constructive, but I'm pushed for time now, and the whole thing was great anyway! -ST

Hi, Brandi - or Wysteria, whichever one you want. :) Cancer...it's weird that "cancer" means "crab" as well as the disease, because when I first read your post, I thought ...

Hey-up, Ampy. As so many have said before me: cute/cool/interesting/unique name! :wink: Welcome to YWS! It's one great site! -ST

Old woman, with glasses, grey hair, and a habit of calling everyone, from the postman to her solicitor, "My dear" Dai'myr. Male.

"I don't know. Having never met her, I can't say. She'd probally say charming, talented, witty, heroic, daring and flexible. Oh, and modest." Chocolate or bubblegum?

"A seer? I'm not sure." *laughs* "How can I be a seer and know what's going to happen, if I don't know what's happening now ? An unsure seer. Can ...

"That depends on the time and place. Blue, maroon, purple, pearly-white, pearly-grey, rose-petal pink, yellow, gold, orange...any colour really. But I've never seen a green sky, so maybe the sky ...