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*smugly* "I can do both!" ~Rohsair "I wouldn't mind. I find that dream worlds and the real world can be strangely intertwined." ~The Raven "The real world! Although, my real ...

The Shapeshifter's head snapped up, and her gaze shifted past me to the trees behind. I turned. Lurking in the shadows was a figure that looked vaguely humanoid. I cocked ...

Ugh, I don't get or like this at all. And the title is a factual error. A positive note is that the imagery is very strong, and the language evokes ...

Oh well, I'm safe on that point. I haven't posted anything notable on here, apart from my historical story which was for my coursework and couldn't be posted anyway. Still, ...

How interesting. A Shapeshifter and an Ogre. And both extremely ugly. I skirted the fallen carcases, wrinkling my nose as the odours of spilled blood and slashed vital organs filled ...

How exactly do Siren's Shapeshifting abilities work? Is it into animals or what? If I know better about her Shapeshifting, I'll be able to understand Siren better. Kallik doesn't have ...

Hey, can I join? Name: Kallik Gender: Male Age: Three Months Species: Imp Appearance: Black hair, black eyes, pointed features, sallow skin, big pointy ears. Is very small, about one ...

Um . . . isn't the point of a crit supposed to be constructive and helpful? Not crushing and biting. I accept that you people know a lot about how ...

I've noticed that a few people's avatars aren't showing up. Is that anything to do with it, or is it just the avatar? My avatar's still going fine. Is the ...

Way cool! Atlantis?? But the pegasi . . . *sulks* Rats. Still, the author knows best. No great errors in here - Sworddance has pointed them out, so once again, ...

Hey, I like Mekare. Phlegmatic. In a nice way. And, oh the DRAMA!!! “Lockegeo Bethazel . ” rumbled Mekare, That should be a comma. The Geezer bowed as well as ...

Pegasi? Oh good! If it's what I think it is: plural of pegasus and not something else. I like Pegasi. :D I must confess I'm getting a little confused with ...

Sworddance has dun most of the critiquing, so there's nothing left for me to do, 'cept say that this was another good chapter - with one exception. It's what Ofour ...

Third crit!..... ...Except that it isn't a very good crit. At this stage, all I want to do is read and not look out for mistakes. Sorry, but it does ...

Cool! :) I just started reading this, and it's great!! :D :D No criticism - there's hardly any to be made, and Ofour's dunnit all already. *scuttles off to read ...