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I *do* like this - I know you did such a good job correcting WAW, but honestly, I don't think there's anything that could be improved in here! On a ...

It's hard, when American society's so inundated with an "if it's not red white and blue it's wrong!" mentality. The Union Jack is red, white and blue as well as ...

VERY good chapter!! I mean this really - your dialogue is very good, and your style is nice and easy to read. :D There were just a few errors I ...

I wouldn't like it if someone else was controlling my characters excessively - I'm rather protective of them - but I like doing storybooks and that sorta thing. Still, mis-quote, ...

Like a lot of your stuff, JC - this is dark and it makes me think. That's a good thing, btw. :) I like the chorus a lot, and the ...

"Nah, not really. If someone close to me is gonna get sick, they do it properally and die." ~The Raven "My best friend, Dai, he was wounded badly in a ...

Interesting story you got here. But the ending was too up in the air. :) The way you said she slipped out the window - did she leave the house ...

I liked this. You found a tune to go with it? It's the sort of song that I'd listen to, if it had a good tune. :D You missed out ...

Hm. Gory. Why'd he have to kill the dragon anyway? You could add more to this. You tell us the warrior's sword's name, but not the warrior's name. This could ...

This was a very nice in-between chapter. And the songs....were they your own, or did you copy them from some place else? Are they in the film? Sad, again. Maalesh... ...

Aw, sad. You seem to have a thing for romance. :wink: Anyway, good writing, and there was just one thing that could be improved: “Are you in love with Elvina?” ...

Coo, Elvina's flirting! Well, a bit, anyway. :) Only a few typos here that you can see for yourself if you do a careful proof-read.

Good. Just a few typos here and there, and some sentances could be worded a bit better, but otherwise, fine!

I never call the sofa a couch. It sounds too weird. Like calling the sitting room "the lounge". But at last I see that I can spell realise with an ...

Very nice. What Duel was this for? What was the prompt? Myth and Imp did the nit-pick, so I'll just say that this was very good. :D The children's dialogue ...