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Intrestin :) One thing: Da-ja-vu hit me as I shuffled through his front door I think it's spelt "déjà vu" but I'm not sure. Anyways, this is good. Nicely writ. ...

Rats, no verdict yet, but great in-bewteen chapter! Side Note: You said "it's" instead of "its" in one place.

"Okay," I said brightly. "Blondies, here's your cue." "Imp, even we can't take all of those," Kira snapped. "So what? Honourable surrender? Kamikaze charge?" "Kamikaze charge!" Siren proposed eagerly.

It was perfectly alright the first time. :? All you needed to do was to edit your first prologue. See the "Edit" button at the top of the post? Just ...

Granted, but it's done terribly! I wish the exams will go well tomorrow

Shells and salt

Oh, lummy this looks complicated! You wanna know this Capt Tuttle bloke's regiment? Does he have a first name recorded?

"I am Rohsair. I am the Lonely Flame. I am me." ~Rohsair "Hybrid freak, hound, the Raven, fool." ~The Raven "I am Fal'edhen, prince of Aval-lon." ~Fal. *shrugs* "I'm... me. ...

Haven't I read this one already? :? Anyway, you've missed out a few dees. Peter stare into space, not willing to believe what he had just heard. Stare = stared ...

Nice! Is it you in the pic, or did you get it off the net?

Those girls are *nasty*. :twisted: Is this set during the Salem Witch trials, or around that same time in history? If so, I think you should change the "Daddy" to ...

*placidly* "Children, children. Let us not fight, for therin is strife and contention." ~Rohsair Apples and carrot sticks? What are you, a horse? Nice Kylee, pat the nice pony Kylee." ...

Oh, is this true? What actually happened? I was so angry that I stopped going to gymnastics practices and in my weak time... Weak = week? Anyhow, looks to be ...

I thought it was good. If this is just a flash-fic, then it doesn't need anymore. But I think you could add a bit more description about what it was ...

Very, very good!! :D There was hardly any mistakes at all. Sometimes our eyes changed color but kept equally metallic , our tattoos did along with them. Semi colon here? ...