Twit

Twit: The snake isn't Satan. The connection between the two of them in Christian mythology was added much later, just like the story of Lucifer's rebellion, as well as the ...

Tttt. NO Biblical evidence for this "Devil's Rebellion" that you're talking about. By your arguement, you're accepting that the Bible's true, right? Then consider what the Bible says that God ...

*blinks* Lummy. Dramatic. Very well writ and all. :D Nicely put, you write the emotion very well.

Oooh, morbid. But good. *sighs* Too good. I entered the Duel as well! Don't be so good!! I didn't see any corrections - other peeps have done that anyway. :) ...

Blame my history GCSE. Very rough first draught. Huddled group of women and children, Squatting in the dirt. Ordered line of armed men, In dark green camouflage. Woman, her arms ...

Yup, very good! I can't see anything wrong with this, or the first bit. :D Great!

I liked the first one, and the second one was good, but the... person in the second one really has odd lips, even if they are pushed out. Thye just ...

*beams* Thanky for reviewing! An afreet is like a bad spirit, or evil thing, and mar is like "brat" or a very bad person. And the language is a mix ...

I like rocks..... they rock.... That was sad. Anyhoo, hope ya like the site (of course) and post lost of stuff (of course) and have a great time on here ...

Everyone else has commented on the important stuff, so I'll just say as how this was good. Your dialogue's very good. :)

Nice n mysterious! Suspense and all. :D

Is there any point to this? You need to put more of it up - it just seems like a flash of what's going on. *shrugs* Could be just me.

5/10 Sounds like it could have some meaning, but I can't look deep enough for it now. Lazy moi.

4/10 S'arite. :?

Oh MAN, they got her off!!! Yahzoo! And foreshadowing..... dun-dun-dun-dun-dun.... In a way, I think that's right. What Jamie's been through can't be resolved by a simple "not guilty". " ...