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I wanta know what they're going to do next and what they going to do with Amasye. :) MM did the nitpick; there's no heavy mistakes in here. Just do ...

Yuh, good again, hardly any errors. :D She knocked on the door . “Are you ready, your majesties?” she asked through the door . The door opened and Lucy appeared ...

"Uh... I never knew her, but I think it was because she'd gone that Da never settled down properally." ~The Raven "When she died, there wern't no one else, so ...

Nah, not to be pompous, I need anything and everything about the War of the Vendee, 1793-1796. It's the setting of Victor Hugo's novel "Ninety-Three", and while I'm gonna read ...

Ain't you flattered, Snoink? :D Mae carnen, Cal!

I'm envious. For years (well, lots of months) I've tried to write poetry that would pass the gauntlet, and you do it first time around. *sulks* From the Vogon's point ...

All that about the Chaos Dragon and Dragon Knights sounds intimidating... :) But that bit about the moon and negative energies was good. My main worry is that "Dragon Knights" ...

3, 4 and 6 of the tower-thingy are good, and the lake looks nice. And the cake... *drools*

8/10 Prettyful, as a friend of mine would say. Just not my thing. :D

Great job describing Brad's anger, though, yes, the bad laguage was off-putting. But his emotions were put down well. :D Although I'd make his speech in the woods thoughts, as ...

Oh, they split?? Money is the root of all evil, and all that. Foreshadowing...... seperations....... bad news..... the BIG BAD WOLF!!! No, sorry, very good chapter once again. :)

Ew, nasty green misty thing!! Very good, and Kitty once again has dun her dooty and there's nothin for me to pick out. :)

VERY enjoyable! :D Since you've done the edits, and Kitty did a very thorough crit, there's nothing for me to say, save that i really liked it, and change this ...

Very good! I read the first part of this, I think, but forgot about it. :oops: Now I see that this is really good! Carry on! :D

Romantic poetry? Not my fav by a long shot, but this seemed alright. :)