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Hello Music! Welcome to YWS! ...Yes, it's a W not an M. Otherwise we'd be, like, The Young Musicians Society or something. Which would be totally cool, except the only ...

Hello! Daniel Phillips (Dan for short) was a punctual sort of person. Although quiet, easily nerved and prone to panic attacks, Dan meant well to those around him. He had ...

... Hi Well. Um. I'm not sure exactly what to say about this. What are you saying? Unless this is a deep and biting satire, the point of which I've ...

Bagsie spot please!

Yello! If you weren't in an area whiter than the pale horse, and colder than it's tiny ice ridden heart Very cool simile, but that should be “its” without an ...

Hello! Like a tiger in a forest, shadowing their pray . Your simile is just about one tiger, so it should be shadowing “its” prey rather than “their” prey because ...

Code: 4gw087976yr. Very much Myself Smart and Linguistic Smart; lowest People Smart, Number Smart and Body Smart. Hardly the discovery of the century. XD

FOUR Lenore died the same night. I was downstairs in the cold drawing room, sitting at the piano, turning through the unused sheets of music. A maid had come in ...

Moon

I definitely need harsh and honest on this . That's a link to the story's page because it's easier to give one link than three and there's three chapters up ...

I'd have loved to do this but I can't do Sunday. Will there be any others in the future on different days?

This reads more like a ranting blog post than an actual review, and the language was a bit off-putting. Glad to see that you rated this appropriately, though. ^_^ I ...

6/10 You have a good strong character voice already established in just a few sentences, but the dialogue, which is vitally important, runs lopsided and doesn't sound very realistic. Try ...

6.5/10 Sure you are, honey.

The screams poured from every mouth, except mine. Why? They’re just driving along. Constant screaming would drive me crazy, and surely would attract more zombies? The cook put Janey down ...