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Interesting. If you're dealing with unicorns, though, you always have to be careful not to copy Peter Beagle. This was grammatically sound, and I didn't see any errors, so mae ...

You've got a big family! :D Hope you like the site, and enjoy looking around.

Yeah, take out the rhyming, or make it better. I drool over good rhymes, but this was too forced in some parts. Like here: I’ve been in more danger than ...

Woh, this was really original. Personification of clothes hangers... :lol: Really neat! I didn't talk to my hangers, but I talked to my collection of stuffed animals. I didn't spot ...

Chapter Five: Dream Lord ‘You want him?’ Haroun repeated in disbelief. The tip of his sword wavered in confusion. ‘Why do you want him? Why? He brings misfortune to all ...

Just out of curiosity, why no more than three?

*Echoes all the others* And you can PM me anytime you want a crit. :D I'm one of the Purple, as Kaz said.

Better. :D You want a title? I'll try to think of one for ya!

As a wild off the wall idea, have you ever thought about writing about Kit as an adult as a sort of successor to Holmes? :thud: Kit as an adult ...

All the birds are flocking over here! Birds of a feather and all that jazz. Anyway, hi, hope you like the site and all. :) As Grif said, grab the ...

Nice. :) Romantic fiction's not really my thing, but this was alright. The ending was a bit too rushed, just like, "Here's some Shakespeare for you" "Oh wow, thanks, now ...

Alainna picked out the biggies, and the thingie about Mrs Ochoa sudden breaking down. It did feel out of place and over the top as well. Jamie nodded at the ...

You could draw out the tension more when Jace leaves Kylyn. It's an action scene, so spin it out. That what someone once said to me: draw it out. Make ...

Very nice, and I like the ending. Nice and unusual. :) But you HAVE to space this out more. Put paragraphs in, and leave a line between each paragraph. This ...

I like Fiver best. And Hazel. You really ought to see Martin Rosen's Watership Down, alleycat, it's great. All of it's on YouTube, so you can see it there.