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"At court. Haw-haw." ~the Raven "Aval-lón" ~Fal "London." ~Kit "Here, there, and everywhere." ~Rohsair What are your thoughts on cheese?

Every now and then the Headmasters eyes would drift to it and away and then back, like a proud housekeeper who has noticed a stain and is trying to ignore ...

This is rather long. I'd trim it, and although you have spaced it out, you still need to leave a line between dialogue. Like: A knock interrupted his thoughts on ...

Well, I watched Star Wars, but I still didn't get all of this. :roll: Still, it had a nice rythym to it. :)

Good! I'll keep all this in mind. NOT that I write horror, but this could be helpful in writing other scenes. Where does the title come from? Shakespeare? (random guess)

Yes, don't give up on it! ^_^ If there's any specific part you want help on, then I could give you another opinion.

"No." ~All "Except maybe my own." ~the Raven What does the word "beautiful" mean to you?

Why should I mourn, for what is life? It is trouble and cares, And endless strife - And my mourning will not change that, will it? But what is life, ...

I lean out the window and watch the little red dots falter, ache in the morning sun, and disappear. I liked that bit, but the rest just confused me.

Coo lummy, what's in the locker?? Sorry, nothing helpful or blighting to say, only that I liked it. :)

I'm detecting a hint of British grammar here. The one quote mark for direct quotes, spelling center as 'centre.' Anything else? :roll: It's not just Brits who use single quotes ...

Heh, pretty nice. I'm still not sure what it's supposed to be, though. It looks like a character of a new weird cartoon show.

Banned for not self-destructing when faced with the insoluble question.

Ooh, yes, you MUST break this up; it's far too much to read in a block like this. What I saw seemed good, but here: She turned to them a ...

Yeah, the first one's better. More sweet. :mrgreen: