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Nice! Well proportioned, ut there's something stiff with his shoulders. And you can see the pencil lines in his very well done hair. :) Very dramatic.

Lol, you sound... interesting. :lol: 10. When I get stuck in a story I imagine it as a movie, and that usually helps me push past writers' block. I do ...

Lol, nice last line. What time is this set in, or is it an alternate one? Why's Regan being chased? I haven't read ny of Guttersnipe, so forgive me if ...

Oooh, break it up. It's real difficult to read like this. Leave a line 'tween each paragraph. Is it really a sport then? Never knew that. It's rather gross, though. ...

Very nice. Nice descriptions. But I don't get some of it. Finally, the eye-catcher. The snare for everyone to fall into, trapped, like she was. Surrounded. The word. She had ...

wow, they have Scooby Doo in Raven's world? I didn't know that... Well, she's from London originally, and she got through into the "paralell" type fantasy world that mirrors this ...

Pretty nice! :D The repetition of "forgive me" did get a bit too much, though. Maybe you could find another way of saying it, and use it on every other ...

The Raven and Nightpad have just run into two of their enemies. I'm still not sure of the context, but it'll get its place. There was tiny pause, while we ...

Short but sweet. :D And a good idea. It doesn't really feel like a poem, though, more like one of those little sayings you see on T-shirts and people's signatures.

Thank you both!! I have forgotten how old Kit is and was wondering how she is able to disguise her voice as well as she does, especially in any yelling ...

... Check out about Queen Victoria. :shock: If you haven't already, look at the Wiki article on Victorian morality above. ^

:D I think I like this chapter best, I'm not sure why. There were other things to see to . To = too? Laroo’s face turned bright read with embarrassment. ...

... It's up. All Flesh Is Grass. Angst, pain, torture. Fun, fun, fun. Now I have about four(?) more chapters to write. It should be done by November. Or around ...

If I didn't get the last part, it's probably because it was a good poem. :roll: I think I got the first part, and it seemed good. The ryhming was ...

Hitchhiker's Guide To The Galaxy! :roll: :lol: