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Hello. :D Just in case you think I'm a newcomer, I've been on the forums and posted a bit a while back. I took a hiatus for a while, but ...

Very good! It got me interested, and kept me reading right to the end. Esme and Fye got all the errors, so all I can do now is say how ...

I read that too. :roll:

What are the rules governing cinquains? As I don't know how they work, I thought this was a touch... flat? Happy, bright, ripe feeling. Change this, I think. Berries, Red, ...

Way cute!!! :D

... Now you've made me feel guilty, Gyr. :roll:

... And quite apart from Sureal's points, you need to space it out. Text Chi and all that. Leave a line between each paragraph. It would be good to add ...

"Being annoying! And cartwheels, somersaults, that kind of thing." ~the Raven "... Not much. I can sing, I suppose." ~Rohsair "I can pick a pocket, though I'm not supposed to. ...

Ah, this is the first part of the other bit I read? Well, good! :D “It’s my mum! Hurry! She is in dire need of a doctor! Her pulse is ...

Well, there wasn't much to crit to start with, and now there's even less. :) I liked it, but felt there could be more to it. But no, flash fic, ...

That Tornado Alley song's good! Nice cover as well. :)

Oh, sad. :( This was very good! I didn't see anything to be corrected, except maybe the first line. It was a dreary day at Hallows Wharf. Extremely nitpicky here, ...

Pretty good! Some of the ryhming didn't go quite right, like here: The raindrops fall this year, The fleeting afternoons are the colours in a fleeting bubble. Blue skies don't ...

Like Razor said... Welcome and paragraphs! I tried being the greatest but god had already taken that. I tried being the worst but the devil beet me to it. God ...

Woah, creepy. Wery creepy. But yes, a mare is a female horse and you called them Rupert and Hnery. And does he get on the horse inside the stall? I'm ...