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Feel the madness!!

Ita est! :D

Pretty, but perhaps a little too ambiguous? I don't know. I really liked how it sounded, but because I'm dumb with poetry, I'd say to be clearer about what you ...

Yes, space it out. Leave a line between each paragraph and each bit of dialogue. Remember to always review more work than you put up. Rate stuff for swearing. And ...

I think you can do that. Lots of historical authors that I've read have put notes at the end or beginning saying what's accurate or what's not. I think writing ...

The next chapter of THIOBS is up. Stormy Petrel. One person said it was cruel, and others voiced much the same opinion. Well, he's dead. It came out different from ...

"Hey, no one's allowed to insult Fal except moi!" ~the Raven "And that's only because I know why you do it." ~Fal. "Yeah, right." ~the Raven "Well, come on, Tana'kiunit, ...

Chapter Seven: Stormy Petrel Li died late the next day. He never awoke from his coma, but as the light from the window faded, and the blood on his head ...

What is a comma splice? Example? :?

Tomorrow's the last day! As to counting, Clau, I count the days by not including today or the day it starts. More.... expectant, like. :)

Nice hair. :D Other than that, 'tis a touch confusing as to what's happening.

Big... I think the red is a bit distracting. It makes it difficult to see what's going on.

"Gattow-chan"? Chan, this is manga-esque, tho?

The finger in the first bit looks a bit bulky...

I haven't the foggiest how to spell it, but how it sounds: Dobreyootra! :oops: Bad, I know. Anyway, hi and welcome to YWS and all the usual friendly jazz that ...