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XKCD Some I don't get, some are unsuitable, but the ones that are good are very good.

I think you're very, very brave to put this up here, to be able to let people read it. The way you wrote it was perfect; not self-pitying, not embellishing, ...

Heh, you're already an Instructor. Does that mean no more crits? :wink: A Fool's Hope It's the last chapter I'd like opinions on specially, but if you [s]would like to[/s] ...

A Fool's Hope If you could do each chapter so far, that would be swell. If not, then just the last one, please. ^_^

Very good! The description again was very, very good. It gives Skye a poetic side to her nature, instead of being the complete teen rebel who doesn't give a monkey's ...

Very neat! I like 6 and 9 best. :wink:

'Zette, you look very 70s. ^_^ I think it's 70s, anyway.

Errors in books annoy me, but sometimes that's just to do with the publisher. My copy of The Memoirs of Sherlock Holmes is simply awful to read. Bad spelling, missed ...

Oooh, big eye! :shock: o_o 0_o o_0 0_0 Quite clear as it is, but if you sharpened the focus on the lashes, it might look better.

Definately change it. Jack Russell is... ew. It's like someone on here said about their character called John Mills. I remember it, because of that. >.

"Sanity." ~the Raven "People I know." ~Kit "Warmth." ~Rohsair "My place in Aval-lon, the Sark, Codahuti, my family, Dai. Yes, I know you said 'one'." ~Fal. "The laptop." ~Clover "My ...

"Naming can be like the White Knight's song. You know, it's called this, but its name is this, and the song actually is this." ~Clover "My name is. I am ...

*hoots* "GIRLFRIEND!" ~the Raven *delicately* "Maybe you shouldn't be quite so territorial, Jake..." ~Rohsair "Well, she's his girl." ~Kit "But hopefully he doesn't beat her up if she just looks ...

Lol, very funny. Is this just a oneshot thing, or are you continuing? I think it's fine as it is, imho. The only things I had trouble with was, The ...

10/10 At present it matches my mood very well.