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When I am tired, my body needs sleep. When I am hungry, my body needs food. When I am horny, my body needs sex. You can be perfectly healthy without ...

Cool! :D Now we just need to watch out for people using uber long ellipses. (This.................. was................ great..................................!!!!!!!!)

Lol, Sunny, it isn't that, I adore it when people shred. It's simply that this beginning has now passed into my box of "old drafts." This story is giving me ...

If we were to get pregnant, we could and would handle it. Say that with hindsight and I'll believe you. ^_^ Heck, sex is overrated. :roll:

It's an oldish word, Heidi... What about Thrippence, Gyr? Or Ha'penny (HAYP-nee) with half a soul?

Pretty good! I can't do a line-by-liner just now, but there are a few things I noticed. When the bag's chucked into Oliku's cell and he opens it, it sounds ...

Go see the debate on this thing and gather flesh. :D

Doctor Kitty, you are insane , and not even in a good way! :razz:

8/10 W00t. You still havent changed it.

6/10 They both lack some grammer, so I don't quite get them. I like the first one better, 'cos rabbit holes are such a cool plot device.

Coo! More! :D I thought you'd given up on this! Onto the shredding! ... Um, what is it I'm supposed to do here again? Short but oh so sweet. Very ...

Yes, beginning should be stronger. Doesn't pregnancy mean mad rages and mood swings and uncontrollable violence and everything? Space out your dialogue at the beginning, you forgot to leave spaces. ...

Very good, but I have to agree with Sacred. Especially with the left hand. :roll:

Definately use it as a prologue! It'd make me curious to read the rest. ^_^ The only things I didn't like were, Sometimes there is one image that is so ...

*DELETED* Gyr and Sunny, I'm not sure whether to brick you up in a sewer full of radioactive waste or buy you free passes to Middle Earth. Just to note: ...